REsume: very nice format, easy to read. Place education before Work Experience, and place clinical rotations at the very end. Otherwise, very nice job.
Cover letter: very nice; concise, well organized, and you clearly state why you feel you would be a good fit at MMC and why you want to work there…well done!
Hi Andrea,
How fortunate that you can continue onto being a nurse in the same unit that you have already worked in. Mention in the cover letter the exact role that you have there and how it has helped you to understand what specialty you wish to join. what attracts you to that environment and the team there? What unique things about you (other than hard working and adaptable) make you fit in well with that team? What do you love about women’s health? Tell me about what you’ve done at MMC so far and some accomplishments around that in a sentence or two!
There are currently 3 paragraphs in the cover letter and there is certainly room to expand upon your passions and your time at MMC in a third paragraph. That’s the real selling point where you can align yourself with the hospital. What is their mission and why does that matter to you?
Grammatically, there is a period after the first sentence, which I think you meant to put as a comma. You used “potential” and “potentially” in the first couple of sentences, which gives me the sense that you don’t expect to get the job. How about just omitting them? The sentences read just fine without them and will make you sound more confident!
Your resume looks good. I would just tweak a few things like the order of subject headings. Education should go first, because that is what’s allowing you to become a nurse. Your work history is applicable and great! Because of your thorough experience, take off volunteering and skills/interests subject headers. You have so much related nursing experience, as well as a degree that it sells you enough without these personal categories.
On the same note, expand upon your clinical rotations. Let them know what you did at each site and what class/nursing category that was related to. This is just like work experience and deserves attention. Use bullet points for these, as well as for duties under work titles for organizational layout and flow. Lastly, is there more you can say about Androscoggin Valley Hospital job?
Nice work!
-Mora
Cover Letter: While you included skills that make you desirable, addressing some points in their mission statement and attributing them to yourself would strengthen this. That being said, I think the skills you did state make you a desirable applicant, great job!
Resume: The design of the paper is super interesting! I think you organized this very well, one change I think could add some more oomph to this is more writing and less white space personally, but this looks great!
Hi Andrea,
I really enjoyed reading your resume and cover letter. I thought you did a great job and it was very clean and organized. My only suggestions would be to discuss why labor and delivery has such an impact on you – why have you decided to work in a clinic for the past couple of years and why do you want to pursue that further as an RN. Other than that, your cover letter was lovely.
Your resume was also very neat and organized. My only suggestions would be to use bullet points under each of our experiences to make it easier to follow. Also, I think you should make all of the dates on the right side of the paper to make it more coherent. I think you could also add descriptions of skills we used at clinical.
GREAT JOB!!
Hey Andrea!
I really liked how you went the next step and made this assignment all the more professional by adding your signature to this draft. You did a great job giving personal touches to your cover letter. The first sentence sounds like a lead into the second; I think if you trade out the first period for a comma it might flow better. Since the outline asks that we include the values or mission of the organization, I thought a great way for you to tie in or reinforce your history with Maine Med would be to note how you have seen their values in your experience, and mention how you plan to represent them.
Overall the layout of your resume is really nice! In class we talked about the balance of black and white on the page which I think you did a great job with. You have covered aspects of your work experience for Maine Med in your resume, but you are applying as a nurse now and not a clinical team assistant so if you’re interested in adding some skills you could add concise bullets with your clinical experience. I think they would be lucky to have you and that overall you did a great job standing out!
Hi Andrea,
I think you did a really great job with your cover letter and resume. I love the format of your cover letter with your name big and bold in the left corner and the signed signature at the bottom. It looks very clean and professional! I would suggest including Maine Medical Center’s mission and values and take a deeper dive into how they align with your values. I also think you can expand more on your skills. You have experience working in the OBGYN Clinic at Maine Med, which is awesome! I think you could definitely “toot your own horn” a little more and expand more on what you’ve learned and what specific skills you will carry with you in this new position. I think you should also mention why you love working at Maine Med. I am sure they would love to hire from within, so you already have a leg up. Use that to your advantage! Lastly, I would add in another paragraph about what you know about the company.
For your resume, I think your headers are organized but I think you should move your “Education” section to the top and have “Work Experience” underneath. I would also include your job title in the header lines under “Work Experience.” I think how it is organized now gets a little lost with what you do there. Under “Education” I would remove your high school. I also would suggest adding bullets next to your action verbs to help organize it. Under the “Androscoggin Valley Hospital” line, I would add an action verb and expand a little more on the Electronic Health Records Conversion Project and how you were a part of it.
Overall, I think they look great!
Ally
Andrea,
I have seen many cover letters and resumes and yours is one of my favorites! I am a very visual person and yours stands out to me. It is very well organized, and I love the format of it. I would just be sure to follow the 4-paragraph model for your cover letter and add in some bullet points on your resume. I think with your background experience you will have no problem landing your dream job!
Nice work!
Moe
Hi Andrea!
Your resume & cover letter looked great and both were easy to read. I liked how you focused on your personal skills & experiences as they relate to the job you want, but I would also recommend to checking the values of MMC and further connecting that with your skills. As for your resume, I also liked how you focused on your most recent job, because that is most relevant. But, I might suggest to include a little more information on past experiences, like, what did you do for the health record conversion project? What did you learn from it or what skills did you gain?
REsume: very nice format, easy to read. Place education before Work Experience, and place clinical rotations at the very end. Otherwise, very nice job.
Cover letter: very nice; concise, well organized, and you clearly state why you feel you would be a good fit at MMC and why you want to work there…well done!
Hi Andrea,
How fortunate that you can continue onto being a nurse in the same unit that you have already worked in. Mention in the cover letter the exact role that you have there and how it has helped you to understand what specialty you wish to join. what attracts you to that environment and the team there? What unique things about you (other than hard working and adaptable) make you fit in well with that team? What do you love about women’s health? Tell me about what you’ve done at MMC so far and some accomplishments around that in a sentence or two!
There are currently 3 paragraphs in the cover letter and there is certainly room to expand upon your passions and your time at MMC in a third paragraph. That’s the real selling point where you can align yourself with the hospital. What is their mission and why does that matter to you?
Grammatically, there is a period after the first sentence, which I think you meant to put as a comma. You used “potential” and “potentially” in the first couple of sentences, which gives me the sense that you don’t expect to get the job. How about just omitting them? The sentences read just fine without them and will make you sound more confident!
Your resume looks good. I would just tweak a few things like the order of subject headings. Education should go first, because that is what’s allowing you to become a nurse. Your work history is applicable and great! Because of your thorough experience, take off volunteering and skills/interests subject headers. You have so much related nursing experience, as well as a degree that it sells you enough without these personal categories.
On the same note, expand upon your clinical rotations. Let them know what you did at each site and what class/nursing category that was related to. This is just like work experience and deserves attention. Use bullet points for these, as well as for duties under work titles for organizational layout and flow. Lastly, is there more you can say about Androscoggin Valley Hospital job?
Nice work!
-Mora
Cover Letter: While you included skills that make you desirable, addressing some points in their mission statement and attributing them to yourself would strengthen this. That being said, I think the skills you did state make you a desirable applicant, great job!
Resume: The design of the paper is super interesting! I think you organized this very well, one change I think could add some more oomph to this is more writing and less white space personally, but this looks great!
Hi Andrea,
I really enjoyed reading your resume and cover letter. I thought you did a great job and it was very clean and organized. My only suggestions would be to discuss why labor and delivery has such an impact on you – why have you decided to work in a clinic for the past couple of years and why do you want to pursue that further as an RN. Other than that, your cover letter was lovely.
Your resume was also very neat and organized. My only suggestions would be to use bullet points under each of our experiences to make it easier to follow. Also, I think you should make all of the dates on the right side of the paper to make it more coherent. I think you could also add descriptions of skills we used at clinical.
GREAT JOB!!
Hey Andrea!
I really liked how you went the next step and made this assignment all the more professional by adding your signature to this draft. You did a great job giving personal touches to your cover letter. The first sentence sounds like a lead into the second; I think if you trade out the first period for a comma it might flow better. Since the outline asks that we include the values or mission of the organization, I thought a great way for you to tie in or reinforce your history with Maine Med would be to note how you have seen their values in your experience, and mention how you plan to represent them.
Overall the layout of your resume is really nice! In class we talked about the balance of black and white on the page which I think you did a great job with. You have covered aspects of your work experience for Maine Med in your resume, but you are applying as a nurse now and not a clinical team assistant so if you’re interested in adding some skills you could add concise bullets with your clinical experience. I think they would be lucky to have you and that overall you did a great job standing out!
Hi Andrea,
I think you did a really great job with your cover letter and resume. I love the format of your cover letter with your name big and bold in the left corner and the signed signature at the bottom. It looks very clean and professional! I would suggest including Maine Medical Center’s mission and values and take a deeper dive into how they align with your values. I also think you can expand more on your skills. You have experience working in the OBGYN Clinic at Maine Med, which is awesome! I think you could definitely “toot your own horn” a little more and expand more on what you’ve learned and what specific skills you will carry with you in this new position. I think you should also mention why you love working at Maine Med. I am sure they would love to hire from within, so you already have a leg up. Use that to your advantage! Lastly, I would add in another paragraph about what you know about the company.
For your resume, I think your headers are organized but I think you should move your “Education” section to the top and have “Work Experience” underneath. I would also include your job title in the header lines under “Work Experience.” I think how it is organized now gets a little lost with what you do there. Under “Education” I would remove your high school. I also would suggest adding bullets next to your action verbs to help organize it. Under the “Androscoggin Valley Hospital” line, I would add an action verb and expand a little more on the Electronic Health Records Conversion Project and how you were a part of it.
Overall, I think they look great!
Ally
Andrea,
I have seen many cover letters and resumes and yours is one of my favorites! I am a very visual person and yours stands out to me. It is very well organized, and I love the format of it. I would just be sure to follow the 4-paragraph model for your cover letter and add in some bullet points on your resume. I think with your background experience you will have no problem landing your dream job!
Nice work!
Moe
Hi Andrea!
Your resume & cover letter looked great and both were easy to read. I liked how you focused on your personal skills & experiences as they relate to the job you want, but I would also recommend to checking the values of MMC and further connecting that with your skills. As for your resume, I also liked how you focused on your most recent job, because that is most relevant. But, I might suggest to include a little more information on past experiences, like, what did you do for the health record conversion project? What did you learn from it or what skills did you gain?